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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012.

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The bar chart illustrates how much money in percentages of GDP healthcare was spent money in different European countries in 2002,2007,2012 2012.
Overall
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it is clear that
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the expenses of GDP in some European countries remained
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all
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 period but most of them fluctuated during the
years
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. Estonia spent the least but uniformity throughout the all
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. The healthcare
expenditure
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 of Switzerland was the highest during all periods without fluctuation.
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 France had high
expenditure
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 but it was hitting the highest
point
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 in 2007. Regarding the highest
expenditure
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 of GDP in Switzerland and Belgium, it was almost 11% and 10% respectively throughout the all
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. Meanwhile, France hit the highest
point
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 of
expenditure
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 in 2007 considerably plummeting to 11.5%, the Netherlands reached a low
point
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 of 9%
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 year. Denmark and Norway experienced 10% in 2012 but decreased to 9% in 2002 and 2007.
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 Luxembourg reached the highest
point
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 in these
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%.
In contrast
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, Estonia spent the least money nearly 3% in all
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. Spain
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 had the same amount of healthcare
expenditure
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 roughly 8% throughout the
years
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.
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, Lithuania,Poland and Slovenia had the highest percentage of
expenditure
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 in 2012 6%,7%,and 6% respectively, there was a dip in spending in 2002 and 2007 with the lowest
point
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 in Lithuania at nearly 5%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, expenditure, point with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Health expenditure
  • Percentage of GDP
  • Trend analysis
  • Economic prosperity
  • Health outcomes
  • Quality of healthcare
  • Allocation of resources
  • Healthcare services
  • Political, social, and economic factors
  • International organizations
  • Government policies
  • Predictive trends
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