The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012.
The bar chart illustrates how much money in percentages of GDP healthcare was spent money in different European countries in 2002,2007,2012 2012.
Overall
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it is clear that
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the expenses of GDP in some European countries remained
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period but most of them fluctuated during the
years
. Estonia spent the least but uniformity throughout the all
years
. The healthcare
expenditure
of Switzerland was the highest during all periods without fluctuation.
Whereas
France had high
expenditure
but it was hitting the highest
point
in 2007. Regarding the highest
expenditure
of GDP in Switzerland and Belgium, it was almost 11% and 10% respectively throughout the all
years
. Meanwhile, France hit the highest
point
of
expenditure
in 2007 considerably plummeting to 11.5%, the Netherlands reached a low
point
of 9%
this
year. Denmark and Norway experienced 10% in 2012 but decreased to 9% in 2002 and 2007.
Whereas
Luxembourg reached the highest
point
in these
years
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%.
In contrast
, Estonia spent the least money nearly 3% in all
years
. Spain
also
had the same amount of healthcare
expenditure
roughly 8% throughout the
years
.
However
, Lithuania,Poland and Slovenia had the highest percentage of
expenditure
in 2012 6%,7%,and 6% respectively, there was a dip in spending in 2002 and 2007 with the lowest
point
in Lithuania at nearly 5%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Health expenditure
  • Percentage of GDP
  • Trend analysis
  • Economic prosperity
  • Health outcomes
  • Quality of healthcare
  • Allocation of resources
  • Healthcare services
  • Political, social, and economic factors
  • International organizations
  • Government policies
  • Predictive trends
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