The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average the greenhouse gas emission which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average the greenhouse gas emission which result from this energy use.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average the greenhouse gas emission which result from this energy use.
The pie charts compare the expenditure of
energy
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in Australian households and its influence on the outcome of greenhouse gas emissions.
Overall
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, the biggest amount of spending
of
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on
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energy
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was on heating,
while
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gas emissions spent their biggest proportion on water heating.
To begin
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with
energy
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usage, the percentage of cooling and lighting was relatively similar, 2% and 4%. For refrigeration, it was spent 7%, which is a little bit lower than other appliances, less than a fifth. Meanwhile,
water
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the water
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heating proportion consisted of less than a third and the largest percentage of
energy
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was used for heating, exactly 42%. Regarding greenhouse gas emissions, as we can see, the smallest result showed cooling, only 3%. Lighting consumption
consistedof
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consisted of
8%. The number of heating and refrigeration was almost similar, 14% and 15%. Other appliances expense was higher, more than a quarter, 28%.
Finally
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, water heating showed the highest result, which was 32%.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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