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Many cannot speak or present well in public. Some people think that it is important to speak well in public, so the training should be from school. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #school
I strongly agree with
this
 statement. public speaking is a
quality
 of a public speaker
specially
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 leaders.
Firstly
the
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leadership
quality
is depend
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 on the
ability
of delivering
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 ideas in public
meeting
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. there are
somany
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so many
people
 can speak with lack of amount of
people
 when they come
infront
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in front
 of
massive
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the massive
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 amount of
people
 they will not be able to deliver their thoughts and ideas.
the
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quality
 of public
speakers
is depend
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 on
this
ability
 if they don't have
this
 kind of
ability
 they can't survive in
this
 modern world.
According to
 Most of the research
that
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the power of speaking in a public place will lead to
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the
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 mindset of
majority
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the majority
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 of the
people
. When we consider the
ability
 of public speaking qualities there are
somany
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so many
 things we can say
for instance
sound
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 of the speaker, words the person
use
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, how they treat the
listners
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listeners
 and time
mangement
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management
. Nobody can neglect
this
 point of view because it is
vital
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 important that the
quality
 should have all when they speak
infront
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in front
 of
people
. The
ablity
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ability
 of public speaking
is
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 not come by birth it can be developed in school.
according to
 some leaders
purspective
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perspective
prospective
 leaders are not born they
are make
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are made
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from
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in
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 schools. we can produce public
speakers
by
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through
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 training like school events and
competition
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competitions
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. we can't expect that
this
ability
 will come instantly from our heart and brain it should be developed
by
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with
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 consistency. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 public
speakers
 are the real
heros
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heroes
hero
 in many
people
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people's
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life
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lives
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. they can change
anyone
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anyone's
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 life in their words.
this
 world will treat good public
speakers
 like a king when they have good
abilty
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ability
 to manage
huge
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a huge
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 amount of
people
 in their words.
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language
Work on improving sentence structure and grammar to ensure clarity. There are some areas where grammar mistakes might confuse the reader.
task achievement
Try to introduce more specific examples to strengthen your arguments. This can add depth to your points and make them more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. This will help the flow of the essay and make it easier for the reader to follow your ideas.
task achievement
A clear opinion is presented, agreeing with the statement that public speaking skills should be taught in schools.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes a solid introduction and conclusion that sum up the main points.
task achievement
Key points about the importance of public speaking, such as leadership and influencing others, are well-identified.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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