Some people think the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
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believe that raising the cost of fuel is the solution to protect the global environment, I agree that
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method can tackle the issue;
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, in my
opinion
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there are
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better
way
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ways
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to address the problem. Nowadays,
people
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are more likely to use private vehicles as a main transport which emits
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pollution
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in
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urban areas. Increasing the
fuel’s
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price allows
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the commuter
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commuter
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commuters
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to use
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public transport
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as trains and trams to save
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money.
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strategy can affect not only the drivers but
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the company that
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carbon
leads
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to the
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in those businesses to provide
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renewable energy
instead
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for example
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contributing wind or solar power which is environmentally friendly.
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, to prevent the emission of bad
pollution
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can be used in the laws,
enacting
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strict legislation
or
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for the companies that
overpollute
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over pollute
carbon or
people
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who overuse cars
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for
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example
setting
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custodial sentences or
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fines.
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measure can lead
people
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to be more aware of emitting
pollution
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and saving the environment. Another measure is to add the global environmental subject in
educational
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the educational
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system in every school,
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can be beneficial for the long-term since the students are educated to acknowledge the
essential
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of the environment
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the reason
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causing the
pollution
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problems.
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, raising the price of fuel might tackle the issue.
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though
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I believe that there are other protocols that should be implemented
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instance, educating the global impact and legislation for emitting
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carbon.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • emissions
  • alternative energy
  • conservation
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy technologies
  • affordability
  • collective action
  • innovation in energy efficiency
  • global cooperation
  • environmental measures
  • pollution
  • economic disparity
  • revenue
  • sustainable development
  • environmental sustainability
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