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The two maps below
provides
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 information about
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city
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the city
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 hospital area between 2007 and 2010 .
To begin
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, in
2007th
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the 2007th
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 map the
City
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 Hospital as a central building is
seraunded
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surrounded
 by a Ring
Road
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 which in the south of
hospital
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the hospital
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 building is connected to Hospital
road
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. On the east of it and
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the sputh-east
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sputh-east
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southeast
 corner of
hospital
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the hospital
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car
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park
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 is located. The area of the
car
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park
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 is open for both; staff and
public
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. As can be expected hospital
road
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 is directly connected to the
city
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road
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 in the south.
Moreover
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 on
the
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both
side
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 of
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road
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the road
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 bus stations are constructed.
Above all
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 2010th map illustrates that
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city
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the city
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road
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 and main
road
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 are
maintaining
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still
l
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maintained
. But
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car
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the car
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park
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 on the south of the main building is closed for public usage under these circumstances on the east of the
city
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 hospital public
car
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park
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 has been contracted.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 hospital
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road
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roads
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an
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on
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 the west and south
is
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are
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 connected to
hospital
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the hospital
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 and
city
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road
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 by
roundabout
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the roundabout
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.
Besides
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 that hospital
road
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 is connected to the bus station l, which is added
on
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 the south-west area of the hospital. Taking everything into consideration in 2010 compared to 2007 , we can see significant changes, like
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car
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the car
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park
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is
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being
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 closed to
public
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the public
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 and
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a
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new
car
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park
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,
as well as
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new
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a new
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 bus station
was
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 built
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coherence cohesion
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Try to include specific and relevant examples to support your descriptions and comparisons.
coherence cohesion
Consider revising sentences to create a more logical flow of ideas.
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You provided a comprehensive overview of the changes between 2007 and 2010 focused on the key elements of the city hospital area.
coherence cohesion
You made clear comparisons between the two time periods which indicate a good level of understanding of the changes illustrated in the maps.

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