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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make Write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make Write at least 150 words.
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Firstly
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, the
table
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 gives information regarding consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
Furthermore
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, we have five countries. These are
Ireland
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, Italy, Spain,
Sweden
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 and Turkey and we have three categories. These are
Food
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Drinks
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Tobacco
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, Clothing/ Footwear and
Leisure
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/
Education
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.
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, when we look at the panel Turkey has a 32.14% rate in
Food
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/
Drinks
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/
Tobacco
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.
This
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 rate is the most high ratio in 2002’s
table
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. After that Spain was 1.98% in
Leisure
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/
Education
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.
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 is the lowest ratio in the
table
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. Later on,
Sweden
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 had a 15.77% rate in
Food
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Drinks
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Tobacco
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 and 3.22% in
Leisure
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/
Education
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.
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, Italy is more over than
Sweden
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 in
Food
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/
Drinks
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/
Tobacco
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.
Nevertheless
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,
Sweden
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 is higher than in
Leisure
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/
Education
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.
Also
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,
Ireland
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 has average rates in the
table
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.
Ireland
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 was 6.43% in clothing/ Footwear.
Thirdly
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, the diagram which is above mentioned describes the percentage of national consumer expenditure by category in 2002. From my point of view, I strongly believe that the
most high
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 rates are 32.14% in
Food
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/
Drinks
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 and
Tobacco
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, 9.00% in Clothing/ Footwear, and 4.35% in
Leisure
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/
Education
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. Taking everything into account Turkey and
Ireland
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 have high rates in 2002’s
table
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table, ireland, sweden, food, drinks, tobacco, leisure, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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