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The graph below shows the numbe of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The graph below shows the numbe of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The graph illustrates the figures of markets that are closed
while
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 others are opened in one region from 2011 until 2018.
To begin
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 with,
it is clear that
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 the
number
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 of openings started at the highest point in 2001 rather than the closures.
Firstly
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, the
number
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 of
shops
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 opened at approximately 8500
then
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 dramatically plummeted in 2012
moreover
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, had grew significantly in 2014 to reach 6000
shops
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 after that dropped again to 4000
shops
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 but remained stable until 2017 to decrease again.
On the other hand
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, closed
shops
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 had begun with between 6000 and 6300 since the year
then
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had
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increased regularly to achieve the highest
number
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 in 2013 after that remain dropped until
had
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it reached
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 its lowest point in 2015 which is nearly zero.
However
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, the numbers rose significantly until reached a stability point over the years.
overall
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, The lines describe upward and downward numbers that explain there are no fixed
number
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 of
shops
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 and the country has improved over the years .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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