Task 2: Many people find it hard to balance their work with other parts of their lives. What are the reasons for this? How can this problem be overcome?
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, they can go to the doctor for help or try to look on their own for some activities online. Any initiative will be good to take care of themselves.Linking Words
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task achievement
Enhance your response by providing more specific examples or data to support your points. For instance, mention a particular study or real-life example that illustrates the stress caused by the VUCA world.
task achievement
Aim to elaborate on your ideas more comprehensively. For example, expand on how joining communities specifically improves work-life balance.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical flow of ideas. Some sentences feel slightly disconnected. Use more linking words to smoothly transition from one point to another.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion effectively frame your essay, presenting the issue and summarizing your ideas well.
task achievement
You have managed to address the main factors affecting work-life balance, such as stress and laziness.
coherence cohesion
The essay follows a structured format with an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
Your opinion
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