The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map highlights two hypothetical sites to lodge a new shopping mall in Brandfield's
city
.
Overall
, The city
is compartmentalized in two parts by the river
. The two chosen areas to house the mall are on both sides of the river
.
The city
seems to be well equipped by featuring some leisure amenities such
as a golf course in addition to a park. Furthermore
, there are transport connectivities such
as roads and a railway to link the numerous zones that form the landscape.In fact, there is an industrial estate located in the south-eastern
Correct your spelling
southeastern
city
plus a housing area in the northern zone, on the other side of the river
. The town's centre, meanwhile, surrounds the river
.
The first site to accommodate the new market is established in the north, near the housing estate.The second one,
would be settled in the southern Remove the comma
apply
city
, near the industrial zone. Both choices may be strategic due to
the fact that,
they are alike accessible by train or by vehicles.Remove the comma
apply
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