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The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map highlights two hypothetical sites to lodge a new shopping mall in Brandfield's
city
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.
Overall
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, The
city
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 is compartmentalized in two parts by the
river
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 . The two chosen areas to house the mall are on both sides of the
river
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. The
city
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 seems to be well equipped by featuring some leisure amenities
such
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 as a golf course in addition to a park.
Furthermore
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, there are transport connectivities
such
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 as roads and a railway to link the numerous zones that form the landscape.In fact, there is an industrial estate located in the
south-eastern
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southeastern
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city
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 plus a housing area in the northern zone, on the other side of the
river
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. The town's centre, meanwhile, surrounds the
river
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. The first site to accommodate the new market is established in the north, near the housing estate.The second one
,
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 would be settled in the southern
city
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, near the industrial zone. Both choices may be strategic
due to
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 the fact that
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 they are alike accessible by train or by vehicles.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping mall
  • city center
  • suburbs
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • environmental considerations
  • infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • development
  • consumer behavior
  • green spaces
  • residential area
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