The bar graph below shows basic information about uses of leisure time among different age groups. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main information and making comparisons.

The bar graph below shows basic information about uses of leisure time among different age groups.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main information and making comparisons.
The bar graph illustrates
hours
of use of free
time
by
a variety groups
Correct the article-noun agreement
a variety group
variety groups
show examples
of age per
day
in the United Kingdom.
Also
, how they spend
this
time
either alone or with
others
.
Firstly
, 8 to 15 years have the highest Free
time
hours
spent with
others
with approximately 5
hours
per
day
but they spend the lowest
time
alone which is one hour. Followed by, the elders from 65 years and over who spend 4 and a half
hours
alone per
day
.
Furthermore
, 55 to 64 and 16 to 24 groups have similar
hours
which is around 4
hours
per
day
with
others
,
also
, they have the same
hours
spent alone.
However
, the
hours
are growing regularly for 25 to 54 groups both with
others
and alone there are 25 to 34 and 35 44 have the same
hours
in both but it is rising to 45 to 54.
Overall
, the graph describes the fluctuating of numbers oh leisure
time
spent per
day
by different people.
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