The graph gives information about drinking habits of the US population by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about drinking habits of the US population by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph presents data on
drinking
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habits of American residents,
cotegorized
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categorized
categorised
by
age
groups
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.
Overall
, we observe that the biggest proportion of all
drinker
types is the
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drinker
people
. it is
also
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noticeable
that
peaple
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people
reach the heavy
drinker
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peak point in their middle
age
. Looking into the details, the 16 to 24
age
60 per
cent
of the never
drinker
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drinkers
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and 10 per
cent
for Ex-
drinker
,
while
in the
age
of 25 to 34 a decrease in the two types of
drinker
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drinkers
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by 5 per
cent
of
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each
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.The light drinkers
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approximately
the
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quarter of the proportion, and the heavy
drinker
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drinkers
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do not even
a10
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a 10
per
cent
of each of them. When we talk about the middle ages 35-44 and 45-54,
the
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recorded almost
the
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half per
cent
of
people
who never drink and 5% and 10% respectively for
people
who stop drinking. The number of Heavy and light drinkers start to
expans
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expand
expats
at these ages. Turning
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to the two
last
catogeries
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categories
, the percentage of heavy, light and never drinkers
deacrese
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decreases
, as there is an increase
of
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the
people
who
quite
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quit
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drinking.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, drinker, people, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Drinking habits
  • Population demographics
  • Age group/bracket
  • Alcohol consumption
  • Frequency of drinking
  • Heavy drinking
  • Moderate drinking
  • Teetotaler
  • Legal drinking age
  • Societal norms
  • Trends over time
  • Underage drinking
  • Alcohol abuse
  • Health implications
  • Statistical data
  • Comparative analysis
  • Bar chart/Line graph
  • Binge drinking
  • Responsibility in drinking
  • Age-specific patterns
  • Cross-generational comparison
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