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The graph gives information about drinking habits of the US population by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about drinking habits of the US population by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #habits #population #age #summarise #features #comparisons
The bar graph presents data on
drinking
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the drinking
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 habits of American residents,
cotegorized
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categorized
categorised
 by
age
groups
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group
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.
Overall
, we observe that the biggest proportion of all
drinker
 types is the
never
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drinker
people
. it is
also
noticable
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noticeable
 that
peaple
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people
 reach the heavy
drinker
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drinking
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 peak point in their middle
age
. Looking into the details, the 16 to 24
age
 60 per
cent
 of the never
drinker
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drinkers
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 and 10 per
cent
 for Ex-
drinker
,
while
 in the
age
 of 25 to 34 a decrease in the two types of
drinker
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drinkers
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 by 5 per
cent
of
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apply
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each
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apply
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.The light drinkers
takes
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 approximately
the
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a
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 quarter of the proportion, and the heavy
drinker
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drinkers
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 do not even
a10
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a 10
 per
cent
 of each of them. When we talk about the middle ages 35-44 and 45-54,
the
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they
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 recorded almost
the
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apply
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half per
cent
 of
people
 who never drink and 5% and 10% respectively for
people
 who stop drinking. The number of Heavy and light drinkers start to
expans
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expand
expats
 at these ages. Turning
list
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the list
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 to the two
last
catogeries
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categories
, the percentage of heavy, light and never drinkers
deacrese
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decreases
, as there is an increase
of
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in
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 the
people
 who
quite
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quit
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 drinking.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, drinker, people, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Drinking habits
  • Population demographics
  • Age group/bracket
  • Alcohol consumption
  • Frequency of drinking
  • Heavy drinking
  • Moderate drinking
  • Teetotaler
  • Legal drinking age
  • Societal norms
  • Trends over time
  • Underage drinking
  • Alcohol abuse
  • Health implications
  • Statistical data
  • Comparative analysis
  • Bar chart/Line graph
  • Binge drinking
  • Responsibility in drinking
  • Age-specific patterns
  • Cross-generational comparison
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