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Band 2.5

People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Attending college or
university
 has become a trend in
modern
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the modern
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 world.Many young
people
 like
attend
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to attend
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 college or
university
.Because it can bring a lot of
benifits
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benefits
 for them. First of all, it can help
people
 to get more
knowlege
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knowledge
. Many
people
 want to learn more
knowlege
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knowledge
 in
university
. And many
high level
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knowlege
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knowledge
 can not
be learn
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 by
themselve
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themselves
. So they want to learn that in
university
.
Second,
people
 do not want to get a
job
. Many
people
 want to get a rest in
university
. They think
get
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 a
job
 is very
tired
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. So they want to have more time to enjoy their
university
 life.
Moreover
, they think attending college or
university
 can help them to earn more money in
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the furture
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furture
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future
.
Graduated
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 from
university
 can help
people
 to get a
job
 more easily. And they can get a better
job
 in their
furture
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future
 life. Because
thet
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they
 get many
skill
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skills
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 and
ability
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abilities
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 in
university
.
Aslo
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Also
, attending
in
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apply
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university
 can help them to
broden
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broaden
 their horizon.
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to have an introduction and conclusion that clearly outline the main points discussed in the essay.
task achievement
The essay mentions multiple reasons why people attend college or university, such as gaining knowledge, avoiding work, and securing better jobs.
coherence cohesion
The writer provides a basic structure by mentioning different benefits of attending college or university, which shows an attempt to organise ideas logically.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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