Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us yo buy things. Other peoplr think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

I
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partially
agree with the opinion of the success of
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advertisement
advertisements
in pushing us to buy things.
However
, some
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can attract us less. The reason behind my support towards the first opinion is given below. In the era of technology,
people
are attracted towards visual representation of
products
.
Consequently
, marketing industries are focusing on advertising the
products
in many different ways by building up different stories and
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them through different
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media
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. When
people
watch
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advertisements
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which contain
story
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stories
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, they can easily connect themselves with those stories, and
this
can lead them to buy the
product
.
Further
, the relatable content can
also
make the necessity of the
product
among
people
, which can
also
create the urge
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new
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product
.
For instance
, if we see any kind of
advertisement
on the difficulties our mothers face doing house chores, and shows us
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dishwasher as one kind of solution, that will definitely create the necessity
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the dishwasher among us. It
also
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us
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the new
product
, without
visual
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a visual
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representation of the
product
, it is not possible to learn about
new
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product
.
Moreover
, it gives us the sense of unnecessary,
for example
, some
products
are probably not for
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age
,
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or
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certain
gender,
we
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can learn that through the
advertisement
and prevent us from buying those.
However
, in some
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cases,
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advertisements can be neglected and get less attention,
such
as
while
people
are watching
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movies
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or listening
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to music
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, and suddenly
advertisement
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up in the middle,
then
people
might get annoyed and ignore it.
In addition
,
repeatative
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repetitive
advertisement
can
also
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their attraction. In conclusion, I personally believe apart from little irritation,
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advertisement
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can introduce us
with
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to
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new
products
and create the urge
of having
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the item, and it will be always like
this
as long as technology rules the world.
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coherence cohesion
Strengthen the introduction by clearly stating both views, even briefly, before delving into your thesis statement. This will provide the initial context for your discussion.
task achievement
Some ideas could be articulated more clearly. For instance, elaborate on how technology can enhance advertising's persuasive power, or why people relate to stories in ads. This could improve clarity and comprehension.
task achievement
The essay provided relevant examples, such as advertising for dishwashers, which effectively supported the main argument.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively ties together the essay with a personal opinion, reflecting on the overall impact of advertising.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer behavior
  • emotional appeal
  • memorable slogans
  • advertising blindness
  • targeted ads
  • skepticism
  • critical thinking
  • ad blockers
  • brand loyalty
  • cultural trends
  • intrusive advertising
  • subliminal messaging
  • impressionable
  • persuasive
  • ubiquity
  • phenomenon
  • defense mechanisms
  • societal standards
  • alienation
  • demographics
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