Recently bought a piece of sports equipment from an online store. When you first used the piece of sports equipment you found a problem with it. Write a letter to the manager of the online store. In your letter Describe the problem with the piece of sports equipment Siri what happened because of the problem Explain what you would like the company to do

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Dear Manager, I would like to inform you that I recently purchased a piece of equipment

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online but it is not fit for the sports

bycycle

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bicycle

Firstly

, When I fixed the new padalle into the cycle it

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bit

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loss and not fit for the same model of the cycle

due to

this

My problem

reamin

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remained

same

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and

eventhough

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even though

I can not have

other

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option to use

this

product.

Due to

this

issue and after fixing the right side

padalle

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parallel

paddle

it was looking like it is working perfectly but unfortunately, One sound started and it

fallen

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down and

saperated

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separated

separate

from the part.

This

issue

need

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be solve

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I want to get rid of

this

issue as my place is

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the

diffrent lacation

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different location

from your office I request you to kindly arrange

the

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alternate spare part for the same model or Please arrange the

exprt

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expert

who can visit

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palce

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place

to fix

proparly

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properly

to avoid any injury, as of now I am worried about how should I ride my cycle. I know

this

complany

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company

has

good

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repo in

market

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and gives all

kind

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of facilities for

custmors

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customers

customs

. I am sending a copy of

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for your

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reference

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Task Achievement

To improve task response, make sure to clearly structure your letter to include all parts of the task: describing the problem, stating the consequences, and requesting a specific action. Ensure each request is clear and polite.

Coherence & Cohesion

Use more connectors and paragraphing to improve the flow of the letter. Also, work on more appropriate greetings and sign-offs to suit the formality of the letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
27Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

200 words

4.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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The Closing

In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by fast food. This has a negative impact on families, individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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