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The graph shows the annual income of languages-related jobs in US dollars in five cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the annual income of languages-related jobs in US dollars in five cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates
about
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language-based
jobs
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, paid in US
dollars
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 in five cities annually.
Overall
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,
Toronto
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 spent the most money on language-based
jobs
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,
while
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Mexico
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 spent the least amount annually on language
jobs
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. The interpreter job curve shows
increasing
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an increasing
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 pattern, starting from 18000 in
Mexico
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 being the lowest and reaching 80000
dollars
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 in
Toronto
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, being the highest.
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 graph stays steady between 60000 US
dollars
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 to 750000 US
dollars
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 in Dubai, Paris and Munich. The annual income of language teacher job curve shows fluctuations,
Mexico
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 being the lowest paid (15000) and
Toronto
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 being the highest,
that is
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 65000 US
dollars
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. Dubai and Munich
shows
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show
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 the same amount of annual income for language teacher
jobs
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,
that is
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 60000 US
dollars
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. Paris, Munich and
Toronto
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 paid more than 60000 US
dollars
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 to translators,
while
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Mexico
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 paid the least
dollars
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 to them (19000).

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words jobs, dollars, toronto, mexico with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual income
  • languages-related jobs
  • US dollars
  • five cities
  • highest income
  • lowest income
  • average income
  • significantly higher
  • second highest
  • one-fourth
  • gradual increase
  • variations
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