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Due to the global shift towards remote learning, many students face challenges due to the digital divide. Discuss the impact of limited access to technology on students' learning outcomes and propose solutions to bridge this gap in education.

#shift #students #face #challenges #impact #access #technology #outcomes #bridge #gap #education
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last
years
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,
educational
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 process has transformed from traditional classes to distance learning, some
students
 impact experiences with
affordability
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the affordability
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to
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of
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the
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technology. There are numerous problems and there are certain measures to be taken to resolve them. First of all, remote learning implies
to have
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 a digital device.
However
, it's not affordable for each student. In my opinion, the best solution is providing a right of selection, it follows that a student may choose
learning
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a learning
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 way.
For example
, if a student is unable to buy a
computer
then
 he or she may attend classes offline. Another way to solve that issue is to set up
computer
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сlassroom
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classroom
 at the university where
students
 may use the classroom for educational
activity
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activities
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. As
regard
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regards
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 learning programs, modern education requires modern technologies
such
 as a
computer
, a tablet and
the
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other devices. For some curriculums in the university is necessary to own a powerful
computer
 or a tablet for undergoing an educational process and those gadgets may cost
big
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 amount of money.
For instance
, if learners want to apply
on
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 any
designers
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 courses, they should be ready for significant expenses
such
 as a new contemporary tablet for creating
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a designers
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designers
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 layout. Almost the same situation in the information technology sector. In my opinion, the best solution
on
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this
 case is to provide a device from
university
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 during the educational semesters, it will help to support the
students
 in their beginnings. In conclusion, I tend to think that
the
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assistance from educational
centers
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centres
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 is necessary for
the
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students
whom
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who
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unable
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are unable
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 to arrange their studying process.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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