The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. » You should write at least 150 words.

The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

» You should write at least 150 words.
The given bar chart demonstrates the statistics for crime in five countries: Great
Britain
,
Australia
, New
Zealand
,
United
Correct article usage
the United
show examples
States
, and
Canada
during
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for
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50 years.
Overall
, it is remarkable that there were fluctuations in
United
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the United
show examples
States
and
Canada
,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
show examples
the minority of statistics was in
Britain
,
however
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however,
show examples
it experienced an upward trend. Starting from 1930, the highest amount of imprisonment was in
Canada
whereas
Britain
was recorded at around 25, which was the lowest.
Moreover
, the
number
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numbers
show examples
in
United
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the United
show examples
States
and New
Zealand
were equal. In 1940,
top
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the top
show examples
figure
turn
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turns
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to be
United
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the United
show examples
States
. Surprisingly, figures in
Britain
,
Australia
, and New
Zealand
were
increase
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increased
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gradually during 30 years
periods
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period
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. The amount of figures in
Canada
accounted for around 115 in 1950. Turning to 1960, the record number of
United
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the United
show examples
States
and
Canada
accounted for around 128 and 100, respectively. In 1970, the statistics in
Britain
,
Australia
, and New
Zealand
were equal at approximately 65,
however
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however,
show examples
there were only
Britain
and New
Zealand
that
climbing
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climbed
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in 1980.
Although
there
were
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was
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uphill
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an uphill
the uphill
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trend in
four
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the four
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countries,
Australia
only
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was only
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the one that had
downward
Add an article
a downward
show examples
trend.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words britain, australia, zealand, states, canada with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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