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The table and charts below give information about doctors in australia between 1986 and 2006

The table and charts below give information about doctors in australia between 1986 and 2006
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The table illustrates the number of
doctors
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 in
Australia
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 over three years 1986, 1996, and 2006,
while
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 the bar charts depict the proportions of
doctors
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 by gender and place of birth during the same period.
Overall
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, the total number of
doctors
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 in
Australia
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 increased steadily over the two decades.
Although
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 male
doctors
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 remained the majority throughout
this
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 period, the proportion of female
doctors
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 gradually grew.
Additionally
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,
while
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 most
doctors
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 were born in
Australia
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, the percentage of overseas-born
doctors
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 saw a noticeable rise. In terms of the table, the total number of
doctors
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 in
Australia
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 grew from 23,720 in 1986 to 29,060 in 1996 and reached 35,450 by 2006. Male
doctors
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 consistently made up the majority, though their proportion decreased from almost 80% in 1986 to about 60% by 2006.
In contrast
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, the percentage of female
doctors
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 saw a significant increase, rising from approximately 20% in 1986 to about 40% in 2006. When it comes to the bar charts, Australian-born
doctors
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 represented the majority each year, though their proportion decreased over time. In 1986, 60% of
doctors
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 were born in
Australia
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, but
this
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 figure dropped to above 50% by 2006. Meanwhile, the percentage of overseas-born
doctors
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 grew from about 30% in 1986 to nearly 40% in 2006.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words doctors, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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