The table above gives information about the amount of tax collectev(as% GPD) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005.

The table above gives information about the amount of tax collectev(as% GPD) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005.
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The table provides data about the quantity of accumulating
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tax related to GDP in various
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over the
period
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30
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of 30
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years
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from 1975 to 2005. Units are measured in
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. As
an
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general trend, at the beginning of the
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period
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Sweden
was leading
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position
than
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over
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other places
thoughout
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throughout
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whereas
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remaining
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the remaining
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countries
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demonstrated almost equal
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percentage
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in four different
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. In detail, in 1975 and 1985
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Sweden
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tax collectors
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46%
nad
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47% respectively,
however
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after
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experienced 51% and
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increased
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rapidly to 70,1% in 2005. The next country is
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the USA
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the highest second
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proportion
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25,1% in 1975.
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,
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the USA
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showed
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a negligible
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rose
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and remained struck at 27%
at the end
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of
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period
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. The remaining
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,
Korea
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, Japan
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Turkey
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stood at
equal
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percentage
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of 15 -16 in 1975. In comparison ,
Korea
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experienced a significant increase to 27% than both
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, at that time Japan rose only 1 % and
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plummeted 15%. In the half of the
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,
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declined to 26% , yet Japan and
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remarkable growth to 23 % and 24%.
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the end of the year ,
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proportions
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32,1
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of 32,1
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% and became
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the
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second largest
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with Sweden in 2005.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, period, years, percentage, korea, turkey with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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