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The pie chart below show the makeup of the congress in country X after Election Day. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

The pie chart below show the makeup of the congress in country X after Election Day. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.
The given pie chart compares data about the array of congress representatives from 5 various parts
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 Country X after the Election.
Overall
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, it is important that most of the people who are in Congress are from the
party
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 whose name is Prosperity
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 the unaffiliated population is the lowest . The diagram presents information about the Prosperity
party
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 records the highest proportion in Congress owing to the fact that it reaches 36 per cent.
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 the second level is the Progress
Party
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, which touches nearly 10% less than the prior
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;
additionally
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, it scores roughly a quarter. The next one is the Unity
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;
moreover
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, it scored just under one-fifth.
According to
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 the graph, the Liberty
Party
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 reports 5 per cent less than the Unity
Party
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 after that, the
last
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 one that touches the minimum portion is the Unaffiliated;
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, its percentage is
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approximately
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half of the the Liberty
Party
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 portion.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words party with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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