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The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following plan depicts the evolution of the architecture of the museum in 1998 and in 2008.
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, during these ten years, the layout changed featuring more equipment and recreational amenities.
Firstly
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, the entrance and the exit space,where visitors can buy their tickets, remain in the same location,in the southern part of the area. The large
garden
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 in the centre was reduced to lodge a brand new cafe
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 to a sitting area.
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, fountains were added to the
garden
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 area. The right-hand zone of the museum was integrally cleared. Indeed the toilets and shops that were present in the 1998 plan were replaced in the left hand of the ingress
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 of the temporary exhibition room.Indeed,the latter were resettled upper, on the left-hand side of the central
garden
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.
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,a new restaurant has
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 been established in the top-left, near the cafe , beyond the
garden
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 in the northern part of the space
as well as
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 a water room.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words garden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rectangular shape
  • central garden area
  • symmetrically arranged
  • expanded galleries
  • visitor flow management
  • temporary exhibition space
  • permanent gallery
  • visitor facilities
  • customer service focus
  • dedicated children's area
  • expanded restroom facilities
  • museum gardens
  • unoccupied outdoor space
  • shift towards long-term exhibits
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