In many cities the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom. Do the advantages of video surveillance outweigh the disadvantages?
To make
socities
more safe and sound, various places have introduced video cameras. To keep an eye Correct your spelling
societies
cities
at
most of Change preposition
on
places
, incidents and crimes happening in and around the cities. Add an article
the places
However
, there are some people who think that Linking Words
this
way can actually become a pause for the freedom of many. But I ponder that Linking Words
benefits
of having these devices Correct article usage
the benefits
are outweighing
its loopholes which I will try to discuss in upcoming paragraphs.
Wrong verb form
outweigh
Firstly
, having surveillance around will not only give the residents a feeling of relief and Linking Words
being safe
but will make criminals think twice before doing any harm to the property or to mass. If still, any incident occurs Wrong verb form
safety
then
police can actually check these devices and footage to go to the root cause and individual involved. Linking Words
For example
, at my work, in Linking Words
childcare
centre, there was Add an article
a childcare
the childcare
suspicious
man loitering around, cause the children's safety was involved, the man was tracked Correct article usage
a suspicious
though
the CCTV cameras and was caught Correct your spelling
through
for
roaming around a private property without any purpose. Change preposition
apply
Thus
, it shows having closed-circuit television cameras Linking Words
are
quite significant.
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
Secondly
, these can actually make people more concerned and anxious owning to Linking Words
that
fact they are being watched. Correct determiner usage
the
Furthermore
, it can actually bring the feeling of being prisioned or caged. Plus, an individual Linking Words
have
to do things consciously so that they do not leave any Change the verb form
has
informaion
that can end up in Correct your spelling
information
wrong
hands. Correct article usage
the wrong
For instance
, there are a lot of shops and Linking Words
restaurant
with CCTV , which can actually use old video to see credit card details and can use those details to do a scam and get money out for their own purpose. Fix the agreement mistake
restaurants
Hence
, there is Linking Words
need
to be attentive in that type of area.
Correct article usage
a need
To conclude
, I believe though some disadvantages Linking Words
seems
to Change the verb form
seem
effect
humankind still Correct your spelling
affect
advantagages
give us Verb problem
apply
enogh
Correct your spelling
enough
confident
to use technology for promising safety and Replace the word
confidence
well being
. Add a hyphen
well-being
There
need to keep in mind that feeling a little conscious or unfree is okay Correct pronoun usage
You
sometime
if you feel Replace the word
sometimes
secured
and unafraid.Wrong verb form
secure
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