The graph shows data about the annual earning of 3 bakeries in London, 2000-2010
The line graph highlights information about
incomes
of three bakers in London from 2000 to 2010.
The Lovely Correct article usage
the incomes
Loaves
hit a peak in 2001. From 2004 to 2010 the income of this
bakery
was declining. Over this
period (2000-2010) trend os
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of
earning
of Fix the agreement mistake
earnings
this
bakery
was declining. The Robbie’s Bakery
remained flat from 2000 to 2005. Following that the line rose gradually and reached a peak at the end
of the period. The Bernie's Buns hit a low in the first year. In 2003-2005 it remained steady after that the line rose until 2010.
The Lovely Loaves
had more than 80.000£ income from 2000 to 2004. In the last
few years
it decreased to 40.000 £. It has Add a comma
years,
poor
showing in comparison with Add an article
a poor
two
other bakers. Correct article usage
the two
The
Robbie’s Correct article usage
apply
Bakery
had a bit less than 60.000£ at the beginning of the period then
it rose to more than 60.000 £. It has more than Bernie's Buns bakery
.
To summarize, Bernie's Buns and Robbie’s Bakery
get higher incomes than Lovely Loaves
. But in the beginning
Lovely Add a comma
beginning,
Loaves
had the highest earning.Submitted by khotkina.ma on
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