The figure shows the results of a survey of 1000 adolescents in five different countries. The participants were asked at what age they believed certain rights and responsibilities should be granted to young people.
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The bar chart illustrates what
ages
in 1000 adolescents
of survey
believed criminal Add an article
the survey
responsibilities
,marrige
and voting Correct your spelling
marriage
right
have Fix the agreement mistake
rights
permited
to Correct your spelling
permitted
youngers
in five countries
,including the USA,the UK,Mexico
,Japan and Egypt.
Overall
,as we can observe apparently the chart,Japan young people
accept more highest age in three rights than youngers
in every Correct your spelling
younger
countries
.Change to a singular noun
country
All off
six Change preposition
In all
countries
,adolescents
in Mexico
that
Correct word choice
apply
they
think young Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
can process rights and responsibilities
under the
18 Correct article usage
apply
years
old.
To the
begin with,in Japan,Correct article usage
apply
youngers
think to need the highest Correct your spelling
young people
years
old to have marriage
right
,about 22 Replace the word
rights
years
old,and voting right
also
has the highest years
about 20 years
old.Meanwhile,the USA young people
believe that adolescents
allow
12 Wrong verb form
are allowed
years
old to have criminal responsibilities
less ages
than other
five Correct article usage
the other
countries
,also
USA youngers
have the same thinking about Correct your spelling
young people
ages
in marriage
and voting should in 18 years
old.
In addition
,the UK has second rank in marriage
age,the figures saw adolescents
are granted to
young Change preposition
apply
people
in voting and criminal responsivilities
Correct your spelling
responsibilities
are
both the same dates in the UK and Unnecessary verb
apply
Mexico
,about 16 and 17 years
old.Moreover
,young people
in Mexico
and Egypt, also
same
Correct article usage
the same
ages
in Fix the agreement mistake
age
marriage
right
over 16 years
old.Nonethless
,Japanese Correct your spelling
Nonetheless
adolescents
believe that criminal responsibilities
and Epypt young people
in
voting think same age to allow,about 18 Change preposition
from
years
old.Young people
think adolescents
commit
a crime Correct pronoun usage
who commit
have
to abide by Add the particle
to have
resoposble
Correct your spelling
responsible
in
14 Change preposition
at
years
old.Submitted by a0953957266 on
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