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The plans below show the ground floor of a library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The floor plans of a library in 2001 and its redevelopment in 2009 are depicted below, showing significant alterations in the layout. The maps illustrate the transformation of a library's ground floor over eight years, emphasizing a shift towards a more diverse collection and modern amenities. In 2001, the library divided its ground floor into four main sections, with Fiction positioned at the rear, History and Self-Help on the left, and Newspapers & Periodicals on the right. The central area featured tables for reading and study,
while
 the librarian's desk was near the entrance and stairs. By 2009, significant changes were evident with Fiction and History sections relocated closer to the entrance, and a new Children's Books area established at the back. The space formerly allocated for History now housed Law, Economics, and Kitchen books.
Additionally
, the Newspapers & Periodicals section was replaced by a Films & DVDs section, adjacent to a newly incorporated computer area. Noteworthy was the replacement of the original eight tables with four longer tables.
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introduction conclusion present
Consider adding a concise conclusion to encapsulate the overall transformation noted in your description.
logical structure
Ensure that each paragraph flows smoothly into the next. For example, connect how the relocation of the Fiction and History sections may influence the reader's journey through the library.
complete response
Expand on the comparison between the old and new layouts to include potential reasons or benefits of these changes in your explanation.
complete response
The description identifies the most significant changes, including the diversification of book categories and the introduction of modern amenities like a computer area.
relevant specific examples
The use of specific examples, such as the repositioning of the Fiction section and the addition of a Children's Books area, effectively illustrates the changes.
logical structure
The essay maintains a clear and logical structure, outlining the library's transformation before and after the redevelopment.

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