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Some people believe that nuclear energy is a necessary solution for meeting future energy demands and combating climate change, while others argue that renewable energy sources are a safer and more sustainable alternative. Discuss both opinions and provide your own view.

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In recent years climate change has become one of the most discussed topics by various generations particularly Gen-Z who are more likely aware
about
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 current situations. Some people argue that nuclear
energy
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 is
fundamental
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 solution for meeting projected
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 needs and combating climate change.
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, others believe that renewable
energy
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 sources are safer and more environmentally friendly. Nuclear power offers the best pathway for meeting
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future
energy
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 demands with low-carbon
energy
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 and saves fossil fuels.
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 that
advantages
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, renewable sources of
energy
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 can improve public
health
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more
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 economically sustainable.
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 essay will discuss both these points of view and argue the merits. First and foremost, one noticeable
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advantages
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 of nuclear
energy
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are
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 low-carbon
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 that produces almost zero carbon
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emission
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equally
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 beneficial to
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 fossil fuels because through nuclear power people can save a significant amount of fossil fuels. Despite these
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, the disadvantages outweigh
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advantages
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 because there will be a huge amount of nuclear waste
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 difficult to store safely and
remain
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 dangerous for
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years
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.
These
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 waste
,
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 can pose serious
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 risks or even death to those exposed.
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, renewable
energy
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 can improve public
health
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more
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 economically sustainable.
Because renewable
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 power
led
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 to cleaner water and air
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 are crucial for human
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along with
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 economic benefits by creating new and stable job markets for the environment
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surrounding them. Another information to be added, renewable sources of
energy
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 will not leave
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dangerous waste that will lead to significant
health
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 issues. In conclusion, nuclear source of
energy
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 offers
low-carbon
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 and
saves
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 fossil that are suitable to
meeting
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 the predicted future demands.
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, their
advantages
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 drawback the
advantages
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.
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, renewable
energy
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 can improve public
health
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 and
more
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 economically sustainable without leaving significant
health
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 issues.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a clear topic sentence and that the ideas flow logically. Using more transition words can improve the coherence.
task achievement
Expand more on both views with specific examples or evidence to strengthen your argument. You can use statistics or instances of countries implementing these energy types.
coherence cohesion
The introduction effectively presents the topic and sets the stage for discussing both opinions.
task achievement
The essay provides a balanced discussion of both nuclear and renewable energy sources.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and presents a clear personal viewpoint.

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