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Band 1

More and more people use private cars instead of taking public transport . What are the reasons for this thread? How can the government encourage people to take public transport?

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Introduction
We can see in
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this
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these
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puplic
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public
 more
pepole
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people
pervid
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provide
 the private cars
instead
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 of taking
puplic
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public
 transport.
Body paragraph 1
Fristly
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Firstly
 more people use private cars
becouse
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because
have
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they are
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 more
spishlit
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spacious
 and private and
quite
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are quite
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 more comfortable , and not
must
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have to
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 go to
stop
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the stop
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 point and
witing
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writing
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, it is
have
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apply
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a
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apply
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one way
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one-way
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 just for you but
mybe
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maybe
 the cost is high.
Body paragraph 2
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Secondly
Scondly
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Secondly
the
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apply
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people use
puplic
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public
 transport
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maybe
may
mybe
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maybe
 not have
car
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a car
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 or
want
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want to
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 go
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because
becouse
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because
 less money,
want
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want to
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 save money, and
not
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do not
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 care about
stop
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stopping
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and
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ant
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and
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 waiting , noising, more way,
Conclusion
My opinion I agree with people who taking private cars
more
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are more
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 comfortable not waiting , not
stop
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stopping
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 more time,
no
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and no
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 noising.
I'm not care
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I do not care
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 about the cost.

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structure
Consider outlining the reasons why people prefer private cars and the role of government in promoting public transport more explicitly. Providing a clear structure with introduction, body paragraphs focusing on reasons and solutions, and a conclusion will enhance coherence.
evidence
Include relevant and specific examples to support your points. For example, mention specific inconveniences of public transport or initiatives taken by other governments that have been successful.
perspective
The essay recognizes two distinct perspectives: reasons for using private cars and reasons for using public transport.
engagement
Your opinion is clearly stated, showing personal engagement with the topic.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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