Healthcare should not be provided for free regardless of a person's income. The health of a person is in their own hands and they should, therefore, be held accountable for that. Do you agree with this opinion?

The notion
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free
healthcare
should be restricted and
people
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that people
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are responsible for their own
healthcare
, has sparked
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debateamong
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debate among
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. I disagree with
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argument and In my opinion,
healthcare
should be free and every person should have
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access to it, and in
this
essay, I will explain my perspective. To commence with, It is true that having a
helthy
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healthy
diet with sufficient
nutritions
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nutrition
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and
reguler
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regular
exercises
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exercise
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reduce
the
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health
risks.
For example
, recent studies
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that higher levels of physical
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activity result
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in lower rates of chronicle diseases.
However
, reasons like poverty, lack of education and unable to receive a healthy diet, hinder their ability to make healthy choices.
Thus
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it is clear that
though some people can afford
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diet, many others can not, which will result in
health
issues.
On the other hand
,
health
risks can emerge
due to
genetic issues and environmental factors.
For example
, diabetes and heart diseases are considered
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genetic issues;
moreover
, viral fever and
corona virus
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coronavirus
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can be identified as diseases,
which
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caused
due to
environmental factors.
Further
, if individuals are unable to access the required medicine, it may lead to critical pandemics, which will eventually
leads
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to economic crisis. The most recent example is corona
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pandemic
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the whole world. In conclusion, I disagree with the statement
of
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that
the
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healthcare
should be provided free of charge because
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individuals have their own responsibility
on
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their own
health
. It is my view that
healthcare
should be provided free of charge because there are many external factors that
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on
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one's
health
and mainly, it is a basic human right to live a healthy life, and as
humans
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humans,
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we should respect that basics.
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Make sure to proofread your essay for spelling, punctuation, and grammatical errors. Consider improving the introduction by clearly stating your disagreement with the given statement to enhance the clarity of your position from the beginning.
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Strengthen your main points with more specific examples or statistical data to make your argument more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Maintain a consistent tone throughout the essay, and use varied transitional phrases to improve the flow between paragraphs.
task achievement
The essay provides both perspectives on the issue of free healthcare, acknowledging the different factors that affect health which adds depth to the discussion.
coherence cohesion
You have an introduction, main body, and conclusion which shows a logical structure.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes your viewpoint and reinforces your argument. Additionally, your emphasis on healthcare as a basic human right is compelling.
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