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The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred

The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred
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In the
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given
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pie charts, It
depicts
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 the five variant sources of fuel to generate energy in the USA, in the years 1980 and 1990.
Overall
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, it is evident that
the
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oil was the first priority
for
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source
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the source
a source
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 of energy in both
the
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charts. In the year 1980, the consumption of Oil was the highest,
with
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fourty
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forty
 two
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percent
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per cent
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.
Although
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, it dropped by nine points, in the year 1990.
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, the use of Hydroelectric power and Nuclear power
remain
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on
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 the lowest point with five
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percent
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per cent
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 respectively, In
year
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the year
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 1980.
Whereas
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, it can be seen that use of Nuclear power had
surge
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 to ten units in
1990s
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the 1990s
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. In the given
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information
 for both the graphs,
it is clear that
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 Natural gas as a source of energy remained stagnant throughout.
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, the utilisation of Coal to produce
electicity
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electricity
had
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incread
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increased
 from
twenty two
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twenty-two
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percent
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per cent
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 to
twenty seven
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twenty-seven
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percent
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per cent
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respectivily
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respectively
, for the years 1980 and 1990.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sources of energy
  • predominant
  • renewables
  • nuclear
  • significant increases
  • significant decreases
  • technological advancements
  • policy changes
  • trends
  • overall
  • preference
  • shifts
  • implications
  • future energy landscape
  • decades
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