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Students should pay the full cost for their studies because a university education benefits individuals rather than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#students #cost #studies #university #education #individuals #society
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It is widely believed that since
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 at university is beneficial just for
students
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' lives rather than society, they should pay for all the
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 they receive in universities and colleges. In the following essay, I will expound my reasons why I totally disagree with
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 notion. The key element for every community to be successful and have a reputable status is having well-educated people who try for their
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's growth and development. Pupils feel valued if they see their authorities invested in their lives and their futures by giving them free schooling, and they will definitely appreciate their
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 and will put more effort into improving their
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 in different aspects.
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, it can be seen that in developed
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, very few people leave their
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 to study or work abroad because of the sense of commitment that has been shaped in them. So, as it is a mutual relation between the governments and the youth, it should be considered as investing the
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' resources not spending it for the citizens. The other reason why governments had better support their educational system financially to be able to offer free
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 to their nation is it will result in having higher-level educational
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 which can lead to the capacity to be the host for trainees from all over the world. When
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, professors, and teachers are not financially concerned, they spend all their time and energy on their academic lives, and the educational environment of the
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 will be appropriate and ideal for international
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 who seek knowledge.
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, the
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 in which learners can attend universities without going into great debt, receive international
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 who bring in great amounts of money with them, and in the long term, the whole
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 will benefit from the situation. In conclusion, if governments do not charge learners for their
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, they will be thriving and flourishing educationally and financially.
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Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and is well-connected to the thesis statement. Some ideas could be more explicitly linked to the argument about societal benefits.
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Further elaborate on how societal benefits outweigh individual gains to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion that effectively frame the argument.
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Good use of examples to illustrate points, particularly the potential economic benefits for a country.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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