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The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie charts compare the
propotions
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proportions
proportion
, in terms of pros and cons, which visitors experience in
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Bowen Island.
Overall
, it can be seen that
high
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 cost of living is considered as the most common disadvantage,
while
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additudes
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attitude
 of the natives
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 mentioned as the most common
advantage
. To
bigin
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begin
 with, half of the outsiders have
raiesd
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raided
 up about the high cost of living,
whereas
one-quater
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one-quarter
 of them voted
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entertainment as the second major drawback.
In addition
,one-tenth of people have mentioned
quality
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 of
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cuisine
 as a disadvantage,
while
 almost 11% of visitors
opend
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opened
 up about
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 quality of accommodation as an
advantage
.
In contrast
,just below half
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refered
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referred
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 hospitality service as the main
pluspoint
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plus point
plus-point
,
on the other hand
, 35% of them voted breathtaking views as an
advantage
.
Finally
,
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weather
whether
 and the cultural aspects are mentioned as
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 and an
advantage
 respectively at just
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 to 10%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words advantage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scenic beauty
  • peaceful environment
  • wildlife viewing
  • limited accessibility
  • high costs
  • lack of amenities
  • tourist experience
  • perceived strongly
  • overwhelmingly stands out
  • main features
  • key advantages
  • primary disadvantages
  • notable aspects
  • common perceptions
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