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the graph below shows the percentage of Australian export to four countries from 1990 to 2012

the graph below shows the percentage of Australian export to four countries from 1990 to 2012
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 of Australia to four regions from 1990 to 2012.
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, the percentage of
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 product exports was downward in
Japan
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 and the US.
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,
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 bought
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 from Australia the best in 1990, meanwhile, China altered that position after 22
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. First and foremost, the
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export
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 trend of
Japan
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 and the US was downward. In 1990, the
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 exported to
Japan
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 accounted for 27%. After 22
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, it gradually decreased to 16%.
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 the
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 to the US went down from 11% to 6% before rising again to 11% in 2000.
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, its trend was down by 6% from 2000 to 2010. And it slightly rose by 1% in 2012.
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, China had considerable development
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Australian
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 exports in the surveyed period. Among these, it increased significantly about 5 times in 5
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 from 5% in 2000 and reached a peak at 28% in 2012.
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, the
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products
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export
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 to India remained stable at 2% from 1990 to 2000 before increasing above 5%
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 later and reached a top in 2010.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words export, australian, japan, products, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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