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the graph below shows the percentage of Australian export to four countries from 1990 to 2012

the graph below shows the percentage of Australian export to four countries from 1990 to 2012
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export
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data
 of Australia to four regions from 1990 to 2012.
Overall
, the percentage of
Australian
 product exports was downward in
Japan
 and the US.
In addition
,
Japan
 bought
products
 from Australia the best in 1990, meanwhile, China altered that position after 22
years
. First and foremost, the
Australian
export
 trend of
Japan
 and the US was downward. In 1990, the
products
 exported to
Japan
 accounted for 27%. After 22
years
, it gradually decreased to 16%.
While
,
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 the
Australian
products
export
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 to the US went down from 11% to 6% before rising again to 11% in 2000.
Then
, its trend was down by 6% from 2000 to 2010. And it slightly rose by 1% in 2012.
Secondly
, China had considerable development
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Australian
 exports in the surveyed period. Among these, it increased significantly about 5 times in 5
years
 from 5% in 2000 and reached a peak at 28% in 2012.
Finally
, the
Australia
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products
export
 to India remained stable at 2% from 1990 to 2000 before increasing above 5%
in
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10
years
 later and reached a top in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, australian, japan, products, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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