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The charts show the share of global manufacturing and exports for four countries between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant. Show ideas and vocabulary

The charts show the share of global manufacturing and exports for four countries between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant. Show ideas and vocabulary
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The charts illustrate the world sharing projected production and exports of four nations from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
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world
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 projected production has 6 sectors (
services
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, manufacturing,
materials
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, energy,
agriculture
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, and info-com tech. The largest
proportion
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 is
services
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 in both 2040 and 2060.
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, the smallest
proportion
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 is
materials
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 in 2040.
Similarly
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,
agriculture
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 has the smallest ratio in 2060.
In
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 the one hand, in 2040, the biggest ratio is
services
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, which make up
at
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apply
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around 40%. The second largest ratio is manufacturing, which remains at about 31%. Info-Com Tech comprised at 15%.
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, the
proportion
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 of
materials
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,
agriculture
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, and energy stay at 3%, 4%, and 7% respectively.
On the other hand
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, in 2060, the
proportion
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 of
sevices
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services
 and manufacturing increase minimally.
Services
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 increase roughly 1% and manufacturing rises approximately 2% from the previous 20 years.
Similarly
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, info-com-tech
step
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stepped
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 up
about
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by about
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 1% and
materials
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 expand
approximately
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by approximately
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 1%.
However
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, the
quanity
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quantity
quality
 of
agriculture
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 and energy dropped to around 3% and 1%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "similarly".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words services, materials, agriculture, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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