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The charts show the share of global manufacturing and exports for four countries between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant. Show ideas and vocabulary

The charts show the share of global manufacturing and exports for four countries between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant. Show ideas and vocabulary
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The charts illustrate the world sharing projected production and exports of four nations from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
, the
world
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 projected production has 6 sectors (
services
, manufacturing,
materials
, energy,
agriculture
, and info-com tech. The largest
proportion
 is
services
 in both 2040 and 2060.
In contrast
, the smallest
proportion
 is
materials
 in 2040.
Similarly
,
agriculture
 has the smallest ratio in 2060.
In
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 the one hand, in 2040, the biggest ratio is
services
, which make up
at
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around 40%. The second largest ratio is manufacturing, which remains at about 31%. Info-Com Tech comprised at 15%.
Moreover
, the
proportion
 of
materials
,
agriculture
, and energy stay at 3%, 4%, and 7% respectively.
On the other hand
, in 2060, the
proportion
 of
sevices
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services
 and manufacturing increase minimally.
Services
 increase roughly 1% and manufacturing rises approximately 2% from the previous 20 years.
Similarly
, info-com-tech
step
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 up
about
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 1% and
materials
 expand
approximately
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by approximately
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 1%.
However
, the
quanity
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quantity
quality
 of
agriculture
 and energy dropped to around 3% and 1%.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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