In the past, when student did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? you should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Trends of studying in
own
country Correct pronoun usage
their own
was
common among the Change the verb form
were
students
for
pursuing Change preposition
apply
an
university degree. But, going abroad Change the article
a
for
Change preposition
to
study
has become more popular and widely practiced
. Change the spelling
practised
However
, there are both advantages and disadvantages of this
notion and the essay will try to depict both views.
Supporting in favor
of advantages, it is a common belief that Change the spelling
favour
migrate
to different Wrong verb form
migrating
countries
in the world eliminates the barrier between two different nations and create
a strong bond through cultural exchanges. Correct subject-verb agreement
creates
Also
, students
get a chance to study
with more facilities in their favourite sector as the universities of the developed countries
are rich in equipments
and other extensions in the field of education and research. Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
Moreover
, those
brightest minds who get the chance to Correct determiner usage
the
study
abroad mostly get full waiver
which Fix the agreement mistake
waivers
help
them to run their Change the verb form
helps
study
smoothly. To cite an example, countries
with top ranking
universities often offer plenty of scholarships and research funds to support Add a hyphen
top-ranking
the
future prodigies.
Correct article usage
apply
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks regarding students
moving from their motherland to abroad. The fact is that,
Remove the comma
apply
students
tend to settle in the countries
they moved if
they find better opportunities. Change preposition
to if
This
, in fact, creates an intellectual gap in their motherland as those less-developped
Correct your spelling
less-developed
countries
continuosly
Correct your spelling
continuously
loss
Replace the word
lose
meritorious
people Correct article usage
the meritorious
it
had before. Correct pronoun usage
they
As a result
, this
type of draining of would-be assets from a country creates a negetive
impact on the economy Correct your spelling
negative
as well as
the social activities also
. For instance
, Africa has lost a vast majority of talented people in recent years who are now shining in the different countries
of Europe and America while
Africa is suffering from a fragile economical
condition.
In conclusion, Correct word choice
economic
tendency
of Add an article
the tendency
students
for moving
abroad Change preposition
to move
for conducting
higher studies Change preposition
to conduct
have
both merits and demerits. In fact, Change the verb form
has
countries
should me
more Correct your spelling
be
carefull
Correct your spelling
careful
carefully
on
funding in the research Change preposition
about
sectior
in order to motivate the Correct your spelling
sector
section
students
to be settled
down in their motherland in order to develop the country more effectively.Wrong verb form
settle
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task achievement
Consider adding more specific examples and evidence to support your points, particularly in the discussion of advantages and disadvantages. This will make your arguments stronger and more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that your argument flows logically from one point to the next. Connect your ideas with suitable linking words to improve coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
You have clearly understood and addressed the question, discussing both advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-presented, effectively setting the context and summarizing the essay.
Your opinion
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