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In the past, when student did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? you should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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Trends of studying in
own
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their own
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 country
was
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were
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 common among the
students
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for
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apply
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pursuing
an
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a
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 university degree. But, going abroad
for
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to
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study
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 has become more popular and widely
practiced
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practised
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.
However
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, there are both advantages and disadvantages of
this
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 notion and the essay will try to depict both views. Supporting in
favor
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 of advantages, it is a common belief that
migrate
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migrating
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 to different
countries
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 in the world eliminates the barrier between two different nations and
create
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creates
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 a strong bond through cultural exchanges.
Also
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,
students
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 get a chance to
study
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 with more facilities in their favourite sector as the universities of the developed
countries
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 are rich in
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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 and other extensions in the field of education and research.
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,
those
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 brightest minds who get the chance to
study
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 abroad mostly get full
waiver
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waivers
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 which
help
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helps
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 them to run their
study
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 smoothly. To cite an example,
countries
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 with
top ranking
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top-ranking
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 universities often offer plenty of scholarships and research funds to support
the
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apply
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future prodigies.
On the other hand
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, there are some drawbacks regarding
students
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 moving from their motherland to abroad. The fact is that
,
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apply
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students
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 tend to settle in the
countries
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 they moved
if
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to if
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 they find better opportunities.
This
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, in fact, creates an intellectual gap in their motherland as those
less-developped
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less-developed
countries
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continuosly
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continuously
loss
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meritorious
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the meritorious
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 people
it
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they
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 had before.
As a result
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,
this
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 type of draining of would-be assets from a country creates a
negetive
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negative
 impact on the economy
as well as
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 the social activities
also
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.
For instance
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, Africa has lost a vast majority of talented people in recent years who are now shining in the different
countries
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 of Europe and America
while
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 Africa is suffering from a fragile
economical
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economic
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 condition. In conclusion,
tendency
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the tendency
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 of
students
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for moving
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to move
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 abroad
for conducting
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to conduct
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 higher studies
have
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has
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 both merits and demerits. In fact,
countries
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 should
me
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be
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 more
carefull
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careful
carefully
on
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about
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 funding in the research
sectior
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sector
section
 in order to motivate the
students
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 to
be settled
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settle
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 down in their motherland in order to develop the country more effectively.

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task achievement
Consider adding more specific examples and evidence to support your points, particularly in the discussion of advantages and disadvantages. This will make your arguments stronger and more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that your argument flows logically from one point to the next. Connect your ideas with suitable linking words to improve coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
You have clearly understood and addressed the question, discussing both advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-presented, effectively setting the context and summarizing the essay.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exposure
  • Educational quality
  • Language skills
  • Career opportunities
  • Global network
  • High costs
  • Homesickness
  • Cultural adjustment
  • Culture shock
  • Recognition of qualification
  • Language barrier
  • Prestigious institution
  • Employability
  • Education abroad
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