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The bar chart below shows the main reasons for students choosing to study at a particular university in the UK in 1985 and 2005.

The bar chart below shows the main reasons for students choosing to study at a particular university in the UK in 1985 and 2005.
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The bar chart compares the students' different tendencies towards studying in a specific
university
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 in the UK in 1985 and 2005. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that students underwent satisfactory
sports
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 facilities in 2005 which triggered them to study in the
university
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.
To begin
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with
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in
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 2005, it is readily apparent that
sports
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 equipment incentivized people to
enroll
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 in the academic institute. Following
it
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that
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, the quality of education was the highlight of encouragement to study there. In stark contrast, proximity to home is the least encouraging reason for pupils. Moving to 1985, despite the fact that
sports
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 equipment was the significant reason for opting for
this
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university
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 in 2005, the quality of teaching had been a remarkable factor to select in 1985, followed by the degree of programs,
ranked
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the
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apply
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second,
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at 20%.
In addition
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,
this
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 number didn't change in 2005 and remained steady for both years.
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, despite the popularity of
sports
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 equipment to opt for their
university
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 in 2005, it did not significantly affect pupils' decisions

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university, sports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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