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The graph shows the population figures of different types of turtles in India between 1980 and 2012.

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The given chart depicts the data about
of
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different types of
turtles
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 in India from 1980 till 2012. The chart involves 4 different species and the representation of their
population
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.
According to
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 the graph, for the first 6
years
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 the
population
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 of
turtles
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 was roughly the same and broke the point of 115, where 1 point is equivalent
1980
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.
Then
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, some species have grown up,
whereas
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 others decreased or remained the same values. It is seen, that Leatherback
Turtles
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 extremely plunged during the years.
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, it is a very rare type of
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such
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animal.
Nevertheless
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, Olive Ridley
Turtles
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 became the most populated
turtles
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 in India. In fact, it reached the point of 140.
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 unbelievable statistics might show that conditions in India
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 the most appropriate for them. Ultimately, Green
Turtles
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'
population
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 remained approximately the same as it was before 1988.
Furthermore
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,
this
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 chart represents quite huge differences in the
population
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in
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 each type of turtle.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words turtles, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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