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Most of the people send text messages rather than calling. Explain the reasons for it. Do you think sending text message is an advantage or disadvantage?

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Text
messages
 or
phone
 calls are a communication skill. Some
people
 send text
messages
 rather than calling. Most
of
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people
 prefer text
messages
 because
this
 is easy and almost everyone expresses themselves more easily by writing. Some
people
 get very excited when talking so prefer
people
 who want to write.
This
situation
sometimes
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 not good because sometimes we may not see the
messages
. If the
message
 is very important it may not be seen.
This
situation
 bothers some
people
. In some
cases
, it may be necessary to send a
message
instead
 of calling.
People
 do not see a send
message
this
 is a problem. Calling is a right and quick communication skill but it is not preferred almost most
people
 because
people
 do not like talking to
people
.
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Calling is a right and quick communication skill but
do
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 not preferred almost most
people
 because
people
 do not like talking to
the
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people
. Talking on the
phone
 in the hospital may disturb other patients so almost most
people
 do not like a talking
phone
. Both of these situations have many advantages and disadvantages. There are places that should be used in both
cases
. In some
cases
, a
message
 can be sent and in other
cases
, a call can be made.
Phone
 calls can be made for urgent and important matters. If the
situation
 is nıt urgent or you can not talk on the
phone
, you can send a
message
.
This
 way, no problems will occur and the
situation
 will be resolved.
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The essay covers both advantages and disadvantages of texting and calling, which shows a balanced understanding of the topic.

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