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The table describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.

The table describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.
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The graph displays the
number
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 of
workers
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 and companies in two countries of the UK from 1851 to 1901.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of employers tended to decrease
year
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 after
year
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,
while
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 the
number
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 of
factories
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 was increasing. 1851 was the
year
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 with the highest
number
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 of
workers
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 and
lowest
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the lowest
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number
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 of companies. The
year
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 1901 had the lowest
number
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 of employees. The
year
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 1851 had the highest
number
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 of
workers
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, 477,100;
however
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, it was the
year
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 with the lowest
number
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 of
factories
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. In 1871 the employees were 3 times lower than in 1851 with a total of 140,123. But the
number
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 of
factories
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 was 3 times higher than in 1851 with 622
factories
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. The
year
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 1881 had the highest
number
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 of companies;
however
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, the workforce was smaller than in 1851. The
year
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 1901 was the
year
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 with the lowest
number
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 of
workers
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, 61,000 and was the
year
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 with a considerable
number
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 of
factories
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, workers, year, factories with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 12 times.
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