Some people believe that it is important for students to work part-time while they are studying. Others think it is better for students to focus fully on their studies. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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, in my viewpoint

work

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while

studying it can be good. but it’s so

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their

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decision. As

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a student

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student

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student,

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you should study and if you need to

work

you can

work

simultaneously. Nowadays, economic circumstances started getting hard. That’s why

student

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students

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want to study their dream places or their dream schools it’s so normal all

of

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students would love to get

good

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job

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and good experience for

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their resume

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resume

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. Students can

work

for their financial responsibility and freedom rights. Sometimes go

to

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abroad for University etc. It can be so expensive that’s why youth would rather

work

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got

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University’s country

while

studying. Major matter

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this situations

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their

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financial problems they would like to have some coffee or go

to

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outside with their friends if they don’t have any money or freedom they can’t afford

this

cost. If they have

asset

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and they are prosperous they can afford these without looking

the

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prices unfortunately some families

isn’t

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rich and they don’t

have

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possess that condition students want to

work

for

more

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appropriate

live

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way

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it definitely depends

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gone to

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country as

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result of if youth go to

cheaper

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a cheaper

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country compared

Europe

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to Europe

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countries it will be

good

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choice for

affordable

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life.

Finally

, I meant it to

depends

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for

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on

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any

student

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life and parents. If you don’t have money you should

work

while

studying if you have

asset

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you shouldn’t

work

because already you have financial freedom that’s why lean

to

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back and study as

focus

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on

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as you can.