The bar chart below shows of expeditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.
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chart
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provides
a
critical information Correct article usage
apply
a bout
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about
categorise
which are food , Correct your spelling
categories
hosing
, transport, healthcare and clothing in Correct your spelling
housing
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Kingdom, Canada, Correct article usage
the United
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States , Correct article usage
the United
Japan
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details
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show
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shows
categoriy
housing is the highest, Correct your spelling
category
on the other hand
is the opposite in the United Kingdom is the deep
lowest in health care about 3%.
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apply
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in category
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the category
raised
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risen
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the highest
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countries
decline
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a decline
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Transportation
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in Canada is
the peak Unnecessary verb
apply
about
20% but in the Japan decline Change preposition
at about
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by
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the United
about
17%.
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at about
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the house of all categories is the highest in countries Correct your spelling
conclude
also
the bar chart
show
the Change the verb form
shows
importance
categories in the four countries.Replace the word
important
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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