The diagram below shows the manufactuting process for making suger from sugar cane. Summarise the information by slecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant
The diagram illustrates the production of
sugar
from sugar
cane. Overall
, there are seven stages in total of the process, beginning with growing sugar
canes and finishing with the cooled sugar
.
At the first
stage
of the manufacture, sugar
canes are cultivated for 12 to 18 months. When they have grown ripe, the sugar
canes
would either be harvested by the farmers or by harvester for a larger quantity. Following that, they are gathered at one place for the crushing Fix the agreement mistake
cane
stage
.
The juice produced by the crushing machine will then
be poured over a limestone filter. This
stage
helps to remove all the dirt from the juice. After that, it is heated at a certain temperature to form into sugar
cane syrup. The syrup will be moved to the centrifuge stage
to separates
Wrong verb form
separate
sugar
crystals from syrup. Finally
, the sugar
is left for drying and cooling before being packed up.Submitted by cathyngo1512 on
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