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Some people prefer to work on school projects with a group, while others would rather work alone. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some disagree
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progress by working as a team. Because they believe that disjoints which occur during group
project
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projects
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 could worsen the output.
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, I don’t approve of
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 opinion. Because there are more good points than drawbacks,
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 as earning great
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otherwise
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 we think together. On the one hand, there are some assertions that forming groups
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 not helpful when missions are given. Because if the teammates conflict with each other, the possibility
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 is low.
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, the individual opinion could not be considered
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 great the personal idea is.
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, it is often seen that some
people
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 participate in
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team activities passively, resulting in others
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 harder.
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, I support that group meetings and brainstorming are essential for creative results. Since there are many chances to come up with some amazing
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individual
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 have done alone.
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, it could be an impressive opportunity for students who have less social
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experience
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.
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, when members fight during the project, they could learn how to treat those distractions.
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, failure of team performances would be the practice that helps not to make those mistakes again later. In conclusion, it is apparent that many
people
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 performing together could lower the quality of performance.
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 it is undeniable that
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 which are out of conventions could be made when
people
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 allocate their
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, I am
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of
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to
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 doing projects with other
people
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 for a chance to grow
up to
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into
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 a better society member.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly outline the benefits of both working in a group and working alone. Currently, the essay seems imbalanced with stronger arguments and support for group work. Adding more detailed reasons or examples for why some people might prefer to work alone would strengthen your task response.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, make sure all your points directly relate to the central theme of your essay. Ensure all paragraphs flow logically with clear transitions. Consider linking ideas explicitly to enhance readability.
task achievement
You have addressed both sides of the argument, which is crucial for this type of essay.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarises your viewpoint and gives a clear opinion, making your stance evident to the reader.
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