The chart below shows the main reasons why people choose to make or break friendships connections on a popular social media site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

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The chart below shows the percentage who

friend

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friends

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and percentage who unfriend relate causes to

break

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breaking

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friendship connections on social media

site

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sites

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First,

blue's

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blue

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bars illustrate that considerably more people used to know in real life or mutual friends, and in less proportion in the work life.

However

, less than ten

percent

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per cent

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should

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to business networks, attractiveness and

finally

increasing friend count.

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the other hand,

oranges's

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oranges

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bars give us

percentage

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a percentage

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who

unfriend

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unfriended

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, mainly with more than

fifthy

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fifty

percent

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per cent

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is it due

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to offensives

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offensives

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offensive

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comments.

Secondly

, don't know

well

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how

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trying

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try

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to sell something

therefore

most times is uncomfortable to obtain porpoises so

than

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that

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could

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can

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be engaged.

Finally

, depressing comments

as well

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lack of interaction with less

twenty

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than twenty

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percent

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per cent

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as a result

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of bite

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bite

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the

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interaction between them.

Overall

, nowadays it is so important

knew

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to know

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new people independently from where and we have to think there many reasons to break relationships because

the

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apply

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human relationships are complicated.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
25
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

156 words

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