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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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The bar and pie charts illustrate three different countries including
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Country
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 A, B, and C
who
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produced
pineapple
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 for export around the world in 2009 and 2019, units are measured in Matric tonnes in
million
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, and the percentage of
coustomer's
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customers
customer's
expences
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expenses
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 for every
pineapple
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 in 2019.
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,
what's
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stand
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 out from the graphs is
country
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 A was the highest exporter and
country
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 C was the lowest in 2019.
Additionally
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, the distribution and retail
occpied
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occupied
 the most expensive zone for
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the consumer
a consumer
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consumer
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consumers
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 for every
pineapple
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. It can be seen that there was a
dramatical
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 rise
of
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in
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pineapple
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 exports in
country
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 A from 2009 to 2019, increasing from approximately 1% to more than 10% in 2029.
However
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, the amount of exportation is reduced in
country
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 B, where they dropped from around 4.25
million
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 tonnes in 2009 to approximately 1.75
million
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 in 2019.
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,
the
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country
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 C had the least exports, falling less than 2
million
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 tonnes, among these three
countried
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countries
 in both years. From the pie chart, more than one-third (35%) of the costs
held
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were held
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 by distribution and retail where a
monir percenatge
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major percentage
 (4% and 5%)
was took
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was taken
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 by exports cost and
producer
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producers
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, respectively.
Similarly
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, Taxes and profit shared almost equal
portion
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portions
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 of the
toal
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total
 cost which are 16%and 18%, respectively.
Lastly
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, import licences and international transportation,
which
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contributed 10% and 12%, respectively.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words country, pineapple, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • world pineapple exports
  • top three producing countries
  • 2009
  • 2019
  • breakdown
  • cost to the consumer
  • main features
  • comparison
  • relevant
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