The first man to walk on the moon said Space exploration was going to change mankind's life. Some people argue that it made only a little change to our lives. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Apollo 11 was the first ever spacecraft with astronauts which landed
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moon and came back to
earth
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in one piece. It was said that the first step set on the moon was supposed to change the whole
humankind's
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life,
however
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normal people think
otherwise
. I believe that
this
occurance
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occurrence
has had
it's affect
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its effect
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on our lives, but
this
has yet to become a significant effect. On one hand, the scientists and spacemen who designed and deployed the "Apollo 11" mission believe that
this
big step outside
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has impacted our lives greatly. From the project
contributers'
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contributors'
point of view,
space
exploration can lead to finding new sources of energy, development in communication technologies using
satelites
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satellites
satellite
and even finding a planet for a better
tommorow
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tomorrow
in
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future. In my opinion, it is true that when mankind became able
of setting
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foot in
space
, things changed for
better
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.
As we
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can see tremendous developments in the technologies we use today and we are able to observe deeper in
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outer
space
to get a better understanding of the world we live in.
On the other hand
, people living in the nation believe that the
change
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made to our
life
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lives
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caused by these projects are so little,
although
costing fortunes. Most of them suggest that the resources used for
space
exploration can be used in areas with more tangible
affects
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.
Eventhough
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Even though
they have a point, I believe the contrary; because the outcome
to
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most of what we are doing in
space
now is
longterm
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and will eventually show up in years. In conclusion, I must say that
while
people are right about more visible changes that can be made to
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for good, in order to constantly
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and
growing
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we have to keep learning about our world and its
surrounding
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.
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Provide specific examples or data to strengthen your arguments, especially when discussing the impact of space exploration.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words and phrases more consistently to ensure seamless flow between sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure, with a distinct introduction, body, and conclusion, enhancing readability.
task achievement
You provide a well-rounded discussion of both views regarding the impact of space exploration.

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