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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph and pie chart depict the
number
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 of
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crime
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crimes
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 (in tens of thousands)
according to
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the
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apply
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age
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 and the proportion of four types of
crime
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 in the UK
last
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 year
Overall
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, the highest
number
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 of
crimes
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committed
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were committed
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 by people aged 12 to 28, and violent
crime
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 was the most frequent type of all.
According to
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 the graph, no
crimes
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committed
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were committed
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 at
the
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an
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 early
age
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 until 12 years old with around 5.
however
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, the figure surged reaching 70
crimes
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 for people aged 16.
Then
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, the
number
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 peaked at 80, which means those
in
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age
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 20 committed the most
crimes
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last
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 12 months. From
age
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 28 afterwards, the
number
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 of
crimes
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 dropped gradually from 20 to approximately 5. The type of
crime
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 with the most contribution to the pie was violent
crime
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 with almost half, followed by property
crime
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 at approximately a quarter. The remaining portions were drug
crime
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, with a slight 1% difference with property
crime
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, and public order
crime
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 as the
least
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last
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 one with nearly one-tenth of the whole pie.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, crime, age, crimes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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