Tha table below gives information about the marriages in Australia between 1969 and 2000
The table illustrates statistics with regard to
marriages
in Australia in the years 1960 and 2000.
Overall
, while
religious marriages
experienced a significant drop over the period, civil marriages
showed a quick growth. The average age
which both men and women were steady
increased.
The Change the adjective
steadily
twi
types of Correct your spelling
two
marriages
exhibited differing patterns of change. In 1960, religious marriages
stood at 12,000 which was higher than civil ones to a mere 8,000. Both type
of Fix the agreement mistake
types
marriages
, which grew to 46.000 and 11.000, respectively in 1970, continued to show moderate
increase after a decade. Meanwhile, Add an article
a moderate
while
the number of religious marriages
fall
to 2,000, civil Wrong verb form
fell
marriages
went up to 28,000. In 2000, civil ones increase
sharply and religious Wrong verb form
increased
marriages
witnessed a growth to 36,000.
Similarly
, as for the age
of marriages
, in 1960 the average age
of brides and grooms were
21 and 23, respectively. Correct subject-verb agreement
was
Thereafter
, both age
groups went up by 2 years until 1980. However
after a 10-year period, while
female's average age
grew to 28 and continued to double by 2 years until 2000, the marriage age
of male
Fix the agreement mistake
males
also
showed a
growth to 29. In 2000, men's average Remove the article
apply
age
increases
consistently by a year, finishing at 31.Wrong verb form
increased
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