Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others aregue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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people
discussing
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there
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their
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bad
situation
were some human
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that accepting their bad
situation
as an unsatisfactory job or
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accepting
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the
situation
of shortage of money
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as
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whereas
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other
people
think that
to try
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hard
on
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that
situation
come out from the bad
situation
here will share my views. On
one
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hand, there are many bad
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that comes
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in everyone's life so
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better to fight against the
situation
and come out from it. there are many
people
who try very hard against their bad condition and they try very hard to come out from that but at a certain
point
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they just accept the condition and walk with the
situation
and accept
what ever
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whatever
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they have at that movement example few
people
have
probles
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problems
in
job
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the job
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but still they have to accept all the bad part of the job and
work
for the same companies.
On the other hand
, I
belive
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accepting bad
thing
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things
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we should take a stand and
work
for our
selfes
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selves
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were
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where
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one can
doo
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do
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the hard
work
and come out
from
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any bad
situation
or problems. Working hard is the
bestt
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best
way to solve
your
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any
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problem
.
Now days
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there are many youngters
they
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who
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live far from
there
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their
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home
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homes
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but
and
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apply
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do
the
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apply
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hard
work
for
their
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better future so if we
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in
our self
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ourselves
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we can do anything. Trying and working hard is the best way to come out from any
deffeculte
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difficult
situation
.
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In conclusion
I
belive
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believe
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working hard and never letting the
situation
to
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be hard on you, always
belive
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believe
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to
work
hard and come out from the
situation
is the best way you can deal with any
situation
. Never let the problem
to
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be very big at the time solve it promptly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unsatisfactory
  • acceptance
  • resilience
  • self-improvement
  • stability
  • peace of mind
  • agency
  • empowerment
  • proactive
  • dynamic
  • opportunity for growth
  • cherish
  • ambition
  • dissatisfaction
  • limitations
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