The chart below shows the changes that took place in 3 different areas of crime in newport city centre from 2003 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in 3 different areas of crime in newport city centre from 2003 to 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart presents data on the changing rates of different crimes in the
newport
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Newport
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city centre over a period of nine years.
Overall
, we can observe that the burglary crime documented the highest
number
of
incidents
,
while
the two other crimes had fluctuating rates over the entire period.
To begin
with,
the
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burglary
incidents
was
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were
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the most
crime
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common crime
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committed in the first two years,
then
decreased significantly to reach 1100
number of
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incidents
in the year of 2008, afterword, it remained static in the
last
four years.
On the other hand
, the
number
of
the
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robbery
incidents
did not exceed more than 1000
incidents
and neither less than 500
incidents
, it
flucuated
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fluctuated
fluctuate
between them, and the same pattern for the burglary
incidents
but with a wider range
number
of
incidents
, which did not reach over than 3000
incidents
and under 2000
incidents
,
However
, it recorded the highest
number
of
incidents
at the end
of the period.
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