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Environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve alone. Instead, it requires the cooperation of individuals, governments, and large companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Humans are directly or indirectly dependent on the plants and animals.
However
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, these people claim that the environmental issues
needs
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 the cooperation of
group
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a group
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 of people, government laws and bigger companies
instead
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 of an individual person resolving them.
This
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the
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gobal
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global
 cooperation is needed for ecological concerns despite
an
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 signal effort from a citizen. To embark upon, the predominant reasons are the
green house
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greenhouse
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 gases emission from the factories and private motor vehicles. These
green house
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greenhouse
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 gases
such
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 as carbon dioxide have
resulted
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resulted in
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 an increase in the earth's temperature which
have
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 led to
the
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gobal
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global
 warming, and
destruction
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the destruction
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 of the natural habitat of the
animanls
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animals
. To illustrate with an example, in an article
of
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 The Economic Times there
is
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 a rise
in
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 5 degrees in
the earths temperature
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the earth's temperature
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 since 1990 which has steeped the melting of ice at the poles of the earth.
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, if the government
will implement
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 stringent laws
such
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 as using filters at the chimneys in factories
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 it would control the environmental issues globally. Henceforth, together
everyone
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 can fight the ecological problems
gobally
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globally
. Despite, the innumerable benefits of handling the environmental problems by uniting
everyone
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 there should be a start from an individual level.
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, if a person takes the
responsiblity
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responsibility
of
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 their own actions
then
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majority
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the majority
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 of the problems will be solved.
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, in an article
of
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in
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 The Economic Times 80% of people commute by train or bus to work which
have
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 increased the air quality level to 1 in Toronto in
year
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the year
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 2023.
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, if an individual
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the
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public transport to commute rather than private motors
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 it would not only decrease the emission of harmful gases but
also
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 preserve the
non renewable
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 resources. In conclusion,
this
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argued
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 that to solve the big environmental problem
everyone
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have
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 to work together be it the government, or huge companies. In my opinion, it is important for us to unite with
everyone
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, rather than doing alone, and follow the rules and regulations which will create
better
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a better
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 future.

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task achievement
Your essay effectively addresses the prompt by arguing for the need for global cooperation in solving environmental problems, which includes individuals, governments, and companies. However, the explanation could be a bit clearer to strengthen your argument.
task achievement
Some of your ideas need more development to be fully comprehensive. Try to clearly present and elaborate on each point to fully achieve the task requirements.
coherence cohesion
Enhance coherence by ensuring that each paragraph smoothly transitions to the next. Use clearer linking words and phrases to guide the reader through your arguments logically.
coherence cohesion
Avoid repetition and work on providing a variety of arguments and examples that illustrate different aspects of the issue. This will enhance the clarity and appeal of your essay.
coherence cohesion
You have provided a reasonable introduction and conclusion, both of which frame and summarize your position well. This is crucial for providing a logical structure to your essay.
task achievement
Good job including specific examples like the article from The Economic Times and your reference to the environmental situation in Toronto. These provide solid illustration for your points.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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